Round One:

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Alrighty! I've been meaning to fix some stuff for a while now on Round One, and I finally did that today. n___n Here's the full list (as I remember it, anyway) in case anyone's interested in checking out the edits (I've included links to the ones with new art and SIGNIFICANT edits), as I redid a couple of panels, rearranged some dialogue, and fixed those DAMN typos. I also realized that the boys' titles were wrong, so I went ahead and fixed 'em up. I openly embrace the fact that I am an uneducated, uncultured American. Sue me. xD

Edits

Page Two (typo fixed)
Page Five (title changed)
Page Six (title changed)
Page Seven [link] ( typo fixed, title changed, AND last panel redrawn)
Page Eight (typo fixed)
Page Nine [link] (last panel redrawn)
Page Thirteen [link] (critique acknowledged and Pinto's lines re-written)
Page Twenty (Kyan's tattoo added)

This round had a lot of things to be fixed, mostly in part because I had no clue what the hell I was doing. But now I do!



Special Thanks for Round One Go Out To:

My cousin Sara, who helped me edit the whole thing.
Meester Josh, for modeling some of the trickier poses.
Grammy, for putting forth a continued interest in reading the round and offering support.
, for helping find all those stupid typos.
, for modeling and providing inspiration, and putting up with my growing obsession with this story.

And of course, all the Spire folk who have provided critique, support, and company throughout the whole thing. Good luck on your rounds, guys, and may the best fighters win! n____n

Peter and Dawn c.
Vin Chaste c.
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Katse and Manic's entry can be found here, if y'all are interested! [link]